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For the record, the last line of Chapter 20 should read as follows:

 

"Amy Farrah Fowler was going to make love to Sheldon Lee Cooper."

 

When I went back to correct a few grammatical mistakes I notice post-publication, I accidentally used a prior draft of Chapter 20 instead of the final, polished one I initially uploaded. I have now corrected the error and shall be moving on. Thanks, notchinc, for pointing this out so I could get it corrected. I would hate for people to get confused.

 

Ugh! I can't believe I did that. Well, at least you all got a peek into my revisioning process. A lot of things can change at the last minute, and substitution two words for one can change everything. LOL

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I turned in my application! (Man, you don't check a thread for a couple of weeks and all heck breaks loose.)

OK. I finally posted Chapter 20, entitled "Flirting With Disaster." I know I promised it a long time ago, but life got in the way.

 

In an attempt to make amends, I humbly submit the following excerpt from Chapter 21, which will be posted in the not-too-distant future. In the meantime:

 

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He broke away, panting heavily as he rested his forehead against hers. “Amy,” he murmured, “I want this. I want you, but …”

 

“But … what?”

 

“I’ve never done it before,” his whispered.

 

“Neither have I,” she said, whispering too.

 

“I know, but you’re a neurobiologist.”

 

Her brow quirked as she pulled back to look at him. “So?”

 

He felt his cheeks heating in embarrassment. Surely she wasn’t going to make him explain in detail. However, the longer she continued to stare up at him with those inquisitive green eyes of hers, the more he began to understand she was expecting just that. “Neurobiologists have an in-depth understanding of all things in biology up to and including coitus. Therefore, your neurobiologist instinct—if you will—is going to lead you in knowing what to do here.”

 

She laughed. Sheldon stiffened and stepped back in alarm. She’s laughing at me? I’m baring my soul to her, and she thinks it’s funny?

 

Her hand flew out to capture his wrist, stopping his retreat. “I’m not laughing at you, Sheldon. I’m laughing at this absurd idea you’ve come up with about neurobiologists.”

 

He stared at her, half angry, half fascinated. Angry because she was laughing at a solid supposition founded in pure logic and fascinated that she always seemed to be able to read the nature of his thoughts. It was amazing.

 

Thank you, Miso. You rock so hard!! Please post again soon!

For the record, the last line of Chapter 20 should read as follows:

 

"Amy Farrah Fowler was going to make love to Sheldon Lee Cooper."

 

When I went back to correct a few grammatical mistakes I notice post-publication, I accidentally used a prior draft of Chapter 20 instead of the final, polished one I initially uploaded. I have now corrected the error and shall be moving on. Thanks, notchinc, for pointing this out so I could get it corrected. I would hate for people to get confused.

 

Ugh! I can't believe I did that. Well, at least you all got a peek into my revisioning process. A lot of things can change at the last minute, and substitution two words for one can change everything. LOL

 

What? The original version had "kiss"? Yeah, that was a really good change decision, Miso. Not to mention, Hot!

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OK, guys. I suck. I know it. I have taken forever to update ... again. I can tell you that one of the main reasons was the excerpt for Chpt. 21 I published here a little while ago. When I went back to edit Chapter 21, it was in there. But, the more I fleshed out the chapter, the more I realized it really belonged in Chapter 22. I hope you will forgive me. You will see that particular section soon, I promise. In the meantime, I will be publishing Chapter 21 tonight.

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Hey Miso, I left my review, but wanted to add here that, for me, this was the best chapter of the entire story.  I really liked that you didn't have them just fall into bed together, but instead, had Sheldon express his feelings (fears) before he would let anything happen.  And he had every right to do so after the break-up in the beginning.

 

Amy's reaction to him was perfect. I'm so glad these two are now on the same "page" (notice my pun).  Wonderful job!  :)

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I hate you Miso. Like 7.06 wasn't enough to tease us...

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"I'm still going to want a Nobel Prize."

"We'll put it on the mantle next to mine."

 

This is my favorite part. It's just awesome. :)

Agree, loved how she replied to all of his remarks at the end.

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see I told you last night that some people do this to the readers.

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"There is a stubbornness about me that never can bear to be frightened at the will of others. My courage always rises at every attempt to intimidate me."

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I had to read it again so my emotions from 7.06 could get more time to settle. Last night I when I read it I gasped when she asked if he was asking her to be his girlfriend and he said "no". The reason became clearer later but - OUCH!!!

 

You're right this chapter was necessary to give a better perspective of the fact that Sheldon wants to give her a whole relationship and not just pieces of himself like he had done in the past. His worry and doubts came through in that dialogue by the elevator. I loved that entire conversation.

 

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WHY must you do.this? I bet.you sit at your computer and just waugh and waugh at our angst. Oh, the power.you doth wield young Miso. An update soon, wish it I do.

"I deserve neither such praise nor such censure."

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I had to read it again so my emotions from 7.06 could get more time to settle. Last night I when I read it I gasped when she asked if he was asking her to be his girlfriend and he said "no". The reason became clearer later but - OUCH!!!

 

You're right this chapter was necessary to give a better perspective of the fact that Sheldon wants to give her a whole relationship and not just pieces of himself like he had done in the past. His worry and doubts came through in that dialogue by the elevator. I loved that entire conversation.

 

Anne-Hathaway-Crying-In-The-Princess-Dia

 

"In vain I have struggled. It will not do. My feelings will not be repressed. You must allow me to tell you how ardently I admire and love you."

Hey Miso, I left my review, but wanted to add here that, for me, this was the best chapter of the entire story.  I really liked that you didn't have them just fall into bed together, but instead, had Sheldon express his feelings (fears) before he would let anything happen.  And he had every right to do so after the break-up in the beginning.

 

Amy's reaction to him was perfect. I'm so glad these two are now on the same "page" (notice my pun).  Wonderful job!  :)

 

"She hardly knew how to suppose that she could be an object of admiration to so great a [person]."

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